Running to the bus stop, rain began to fall.
This sort of sentence pops up a lot in stories that I edit.
Tell me: in the example above, who is
running? There are two nouns in the sentence (“the bus stop” and “rain”), but neither
of them is running. That’s the problem here—you generally can’t have an action
in a sentence without a subject to perform it. “Rain” is the subject of the
sentence (you can tell because it’s the only noun that’s performing an action—in
this case, beginning to fall). Since there isn’t any other subject, this
sentence implies that the rain was
running to the bus stop when it began to fall.
Let’s get technical for a moment. Running, like many “ing” forms of verbs, is what we call a present participle. Present participles
have many uses—in the example above, the participle is being used to indicate
that an action (running) is taking place simultaneous to another action (the
rain beginning to fall). The entire phrase (“running to the bus stop”) is what
we call an adverbial phrase—that is,
a phrase that acts as an adverb, modifying action. But even though the phrase
is acting as an adverb, the present participle is still a verb; it needs to
have a subject performing the action, and that subject has to be present in the
same sentence as the participle. When the subject that should be attached to a
participle is missing, we call this a dangling
participle.
Now, you don’t actually have to remember all of that. Here’s
what you need to remember: if you use an “ing” verb, it still needs to be
performed by a subject. With that in mind, there are several ways that we could
fix our example sentence:
As Brad was
running to the bus stop, rain began to fall.
Running to
the bus stop, Brad was dismayed when rain began to fall.
Rain began
to fall. Running to the bus stop, Brad was caught right in the middle of it.
In the first solution, we simply insert the proper subject
into the original sentence. In the second solution, we make “Brad” the subject
of the entire sentence, moving “rain” to a peripheral position. In the third
example, we make “Brad” the subject of the sentence and move “rain” to its own
sentence. Any of these solutions is adequate, though the first solution is
strongest (see if you can figure out why).
Now, sometimes an “ing” verb can still be confusing even if
the subject is present in the sentence:
Brad left
the group cursing.
Who is cursing—Brad
or the group? If it’s Brad, then this
could be cleared up by moving the “ing” verb to the beginning of the sentence:
Cursing,
Brad left the group.
Here are some other examples of dangling participles—if you
want some practice, try fixing each of these:
Reading a
book, the dog scratched at my leg.
She left the room sleepwalking.
Opening the
refrigerator, the milk carton fell to the floor and broke open.
Falling
from the sky in flames, the house was crushed by the airplane wreckage.
But be warned: this is not the only common problem that can arise with "ing" verbs. Check out these two posts for more.
But be warned: this is not the only common problem that can arise with "ing" verbs. Check out these two posts for more.
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